[ADVANCED ENGLISH WRITING] Final Draft of Literacy Narrative

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Advanced English Writing

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2024. 12. 14

Prof. 0000

 

My relationship with English

 

Whatever language I speak, I stammer. I remember the first time I stammered when I was 13. Fortunately, now I don’t stammer as much as I used to. But still, I stammer when I am in an unfamiliar situation such as job interview, presentation, group discussion or talking to cute girls.

 

I am often asked in which language I stammer more. English is a little easier to pronounce because I feel English pronunciation has a flow and words are more connected to each other than Korean. But I have to think about grammars and vocabularies and sometimes I basically don’t know what to say in English. So, I stammer both languages (English & Korean) in same extent.

 

Living as a Yonsei English major student with intermediate English proficiency who occasionally stammer is tough. Every group meeting and discussion is a burden for me. This semester, I suffer the most in Business Communication class. The class curriculum mostly consists of discussion sessions. I remember the first time I participate in the group discussion in the class. The topic is about making a fictitious company, so our team ended up making t-shirts company. With three team members, I discuss ideas about the fashion company which I know nothing about. Another problem is that they speak English so fast that I have difficulty following the conversation. As the discussion goes on, they suddenly start to talk about dogs. I also have a dog, so I want to join the conversation. But I’m not confident enough to squeeze into the conversation. Most of all, I am concerned about my stammering. Later that day, I think about what I really wanted to say. I wanted to say that “I hope there’s something I could contribute for the team.”

 

This class has been a huge obstacle for half a semester. I even consider dropping class and taking an extra semester. But I can’t since I want to graduate right after this semester. Fortunately, I notice that I could switch the class into P/NP evaluation. This will require me to get a minimum of C0 to pass the class. A faint hope blossoms.

After that, things start to change a lot. I feel free. I am starting to enjoy the class. I still stammer and stumble on words when I participate in group discussions, but it doesn’t affect me as much as it used to. I don’t worry about saying something silly. I don’t care much about my peers’ or the professor’s evaluation on me. Instead, I just try to enjoy the class and practice English speaking during the discussion. I start to joke around a lot. My final project team members happen to be all ethnically Asian. So, I name my team “Justin and the good-looking, beautiful, amazing, funny, creative, smart, sexy, high-rolling, crazy rich Asian friends” which eventually end up “Just-in time”. I joke to a Russian girl saying “Xopowo, comrade!”. Every team member, including me, enjoys the group discussion. As I laugh more, make more jokes and engage more during the discussion, people approach me and eventually become my friends. As I get to know them more, I stammer less and less. What I find out is that the more I worry about vocabularies & grammars, errors, stammering and grades, the more my English proficiency diminishes.

 

My relationship with English has been not very good. I’ve been putting my effort to save my relationship with English, but I ended up stammering. It worsens my relationship with English, even language. But still, English is something that I am thankful for. Without English, I wouldn’t have been accepted in Yonsei. Without English, I couldn’t have taken classes conducted in English in the first place. A huge chunk of my life consists of English. Whether I like it or not, I can’t deny my relationship I had with English. This semester, I mend my relationship with English a little by switch the communications class from letter grade to P/NP evaluation. Also, by joking and laugh a lot in English with team member, I feel a little closer to English. I strongly believe that my relationship with English will get a little better next semester.

 

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The earned ending could be better but still, your examples are so much stronger. I enjoyed reading! Keep working on cutting unnecessary words and sentences.